Griffis' Notes and Suggestions

Block 1:

- Tucker keep your diction, animation and projection, but instead of talking to the audience, share your story with them. Tell this story like you would in a small group making eye contact with people in each part of the group.

- Amy you must be old! React huge when Ashlynn hisses. This would startle you and we must see it.

Block 2:

- Mac be sure you show the audience how exhausted all of this ugliness makes you when you are asking about gunshots 

- Street people your actions are great! You must fall silent when Gutman talks. He is setting our story and the audience is missing it.

- Kadyn you must be quiet while dying when there is action in the hotel. We are looking at you too much here instead of hearing the action.

- We need to establish the power of Gutman here. There needs to be a dominate/submissive relationship built between Sam and Mac. We need to make sure audience knows Sam is in charge here.

- Crowd: our entire focus must be On Mac and Sam until "hermano" is spoken. Do NOT do any motion or sound that could take away attention from those two.

- Sam we need you to project your voice from your diaphragm. Your abs should hurt after a performance. Your voice is naturally loud, now project it to the back row with precise diction.

- Gypsy, we meet you for the first time in the first announcement here. Vary the way you say this. Be dramatic. Look up when you say moon. 

- crowd be quiet when Sam says clown line.

Block 3:

- Jonah react bigger when officer says, "no hay western union." He just went back to Spanish after he spoke English to you in the line before.

- Jonah vary your voice as you tell us your past story. This needs to be the best story you've ever told. Sometimes this seems like lines in a play.

Block 4:

- Kylie focus on diction when you are the loan shark. Every word and syllable must be clear.

Block 5:

-Jonah you must make the audience love you here.

-Mac full drama. Emphasize the line "stiff"

- M&J don't predict each other's lines here. Listen and react.

- Jonah we must hear your line,"How does he get off of it?"

Block 6:

- Jonah pause after Sam says, "Are you jobless?" It should sink in before you say vagrancy line.

- Say "I've been shanghaied," with exhausted desperation, not anger.

Block 7:

- Make us feel the relationship between cass and Kilroy more.

- Could Evan do flip as script says between Mulligans leaving and Camillas line?

- Sydney at some point, try to take the letter from Mac's pocket. If he won't look at it, you will.

- Mac don't turn your back to audience when you kneel down.

Block 9:

-Great Action, but lets take down the volume a little if you don't have a scripted line.

Block 11:

- Kadyn touch yourself more on the well.

Block 12:

- Jonah and Maky, you need to listen and react to each other's lines here. You predict the others line here almost every time.

- Jonah huge reaction when she says, "the street cleaners are waiting for you."

Block 13:

-Jonah look more sad when you read the letter. Your friend is now broke and homeless and you are about to tell him that.

Block 14:

- Jonah start out stronger when you fight the street cleaners, then fade quickly when you make contact with them.

Block 15:

-Ashlynn, la madrecita is old! You seemed too young!